First off, the beginning goes on for too long being the same thing....we get the point. Either make some dynamic contrast, new instrumentation, or introduce a melody. Once past that, it goes pretty well until you get to the chords and then I get bored because you don't do any kind of emphasis or dynamics anywhere. They sound cool....but so does a number of country songs before the singers start singing. I also suggest using space rather than volume to make things exciting. I think the layering of your instrumentation is good though, I just can't give a clear "YES!" because of the absolutely horrid balance you let finale get away with.